Just wondered if there were any other aspiring song writers out there :)

Here's one of my own:

(v. 1)
A little girl
In a grown up world
Not knowing where to go
She turns to see
And what she see's
Is pain
"This world is so big" she cried
So many changes in her life
Not knowing what to do

(chorus)
But this little girl
She's lost her way
And now she'll find
The world will make her pay
It will make her pay..

(v. 2)
She ran away from the life she feared
Only to find another.
She thought all her problems
Would just dissappear
But soon she found that nothing's easier in this world
Just because her wayward friends say so

(ending chorus)
But this little girl
She lost her way
And now she's found
It made her pay
It hurts so much

Ya I like the same, but I like some metal. Dream Theater rox btw. I gotta go to bed now but tomorrow I'll post my fave bands

OK here is my second song ...that ive posted ..its my fourth and most resent song that I've written and of course ©All Rights Reserved ..that's fun

"Time" (thats its title for now I don't know if I'm going to keep it)

Time is something that is given to you
You can't give your time without having recieved it first

You must use your time for the good,
for the endless memories

You look out your door thinking of past times
it's all to much to bare when you want to the people close to you to feel what you feel and have
But they're too stubborn and selfish to realize that their time is almost up

Time is like a train
A Train of Thought
Traveling at the speed of light
...it's a beautiful.. yet saddening sight

You can't spend your life depressing over the loss of a loved one
...or knowing that you won't see someone again

...but maybe you will
maybe life is just a minute in an hour

You can't spend your life worring about will happen next
Take it slow
You'll only be a child for 20 seconds in a minute

You can't live life not looking at others
You can't pass them by
Your time will die

At the sight of the flight of the Train of Thought

...of the memories

...of Time (anyway this isnt done there might be more and hopefully be some editing for the parts that dont make since)
-Sean

Very cool. I like it a lot :) makes you think.

As for my fave. bands/artists, here's a small few (i like pretty muich any style of music)

.Black Label Society
.Matchbook Romance
.Metallica
.Seventh Day Slumber
.Demon Hunter
.Blink 182
.Dream Theater
.Switchfoot
.Yellowcard
.Hoobastank
.KJ52
.D12
.Linkin Park
.P.O.D
.Mozart (i love playing the piano, so I appriciate classical music ;)
.Good Charlotte
.Dead Poetic

Lots more lol, way too many to list

oh ...well I like Dream THeater and Metallica ...well I respect Metallica but dont particularly like most of their songs. and Blink 182 has a good drummer for a pop band. and Good Charlotte has some good lyrics from what Ive heard. the rest oh either have never heard of or dont like ..oh and yellowcard theyre ok.

But as for an actually list of what I listen to and like would go something like this:
Dream Theater
Led Zeppelin
Queensryche
Metallica (for a few songs)
Kansas
Bob Dylan (let me tell ya the story of the hurricane ru du b kucachu haha)
Cat Stevens
The Beatles
Rush
Yes
The Travis Larson
Pink Floyd
and Steely Dan
..oh yeah and Styx
Coheed and Cambria
Lynryd Skynyrd
and Journey
...but mostly Dream Theater haha

lol, nice. I haven't heard of one or two, but the one's I know I like also (just didn't think of um ;) And some of those bands are Christian bands so not too much on the mainstream, but there's some that will be soon, they have awesome lyrics/styles so you should check some out. (Styx is a good also, can't believe i forget um!)

Here's a longer song/poem that I wrote of course ©All Rights Reserved as with all my other songs/poems. (thnx for the reminder Sean ;)
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Title:My Crying Soul

I'm a weary soul
Constantly being drove down
The taunting laughter controls me.
My thoughts are taken over
Enslaved to those who hate me
Steered by what other's want.

My empty soul cries out
Save me from this torture
From the death I feel coming on.
But emotion fleed my face
As I picked up the daggar
And began to cut away.

I asked my soul the point of living
And it responded
Because He loves you.
He won't tease you
My soul cried
He loves you too much.

I began to weep
Crying those years away
Finally letting go of my past.
Those who had done me wrong
Those who used me
Began to fade away.

One phrase consumed my mind
One simple phrase stopped my self-destruction
And that simple phrase was I love you.
Stay here, my soul cried
Don't leave this way
Don't die in pain and heartache

Then He came into my life
He changed it all
He turned my heading around.
Bound by the past
I am no longer.
Now letting go of the bitter years

Running away wasn't the answer
To stay and face my hate and fear
Was the only way to end it.
Instead of using the daggar on me
I used it on the strings of my pain
My sorrow was then cut away.

The empty void now filled
I must move foreward
And must not give into my hate again.
My weary soul is healed
My past now gone
My bitterness is no more.

Someone Special
The first time I met you I realized that you were not like the rest.
That you were different in some way or another, that you were someone
Special. The second time I met you the feelings grew stronger and more
Detailed.

Someone special is the name I have for you because of the way you
Laugh and the way you smile. The way you treat everyone around you and
The way you respect everyone you meet.

The third time I met you I fell in love with someone special and that
Person is you. You are the one I love and there will never bee anyone that
makes me feel the way that you do and there will never be anyone who
Can replace the love I feel and will always feel for you.

Someone special is the name I have for you because of the way you
Laugh and the way you smile. The way you treat everyone around you and
The way you respect everyone you meet.

As I wrote this song I was thinking of the one person in this world that
Made me feel that I was wanted and needed and that I will always love that
Person with all my heart and all my soul and that person is you

Written by
Michael Matthews

Beautiful song :D

Now if I could ever get music put to it..<G>

TokenArt

I could prob help with that :)

I have alot of poems I wrote to..but this is really my own song ever did..and I wrote it when I was 13...LONG time ago

TokenArt

Questions

Am I going crazy,
All my life a little hazy?
Am I going insane,
How can I avoid the endless pain?
My world is falling apart,
How can I heal this bleeding heart?
My nights are full of sorrow,
Will I leave this world tomorrow?
My days are full of sunshine,
But how can I ease my troubled mind?
Will I find love,
Or will it fall from above?
Questions fill my mind,
But answers I can not find.
Can I find the path,
To lead me from my troubled past?
With all the Questions that I ask,
How long will I last?

TokenArt

Awesome :) I've written similar ones also, but I'd have to look for them, maybe tomorrow I'll post some :) I have a lot of poems integrated into my work, so ya :D Awesome poem

arkness abounds
Hunger takes over
Return to my hunting grounds
Crouching in wait..
A meal to abate
This hunger I feel
Need blood to heal
Prey approaches
Closer and closer it walks
Thirst and hunger well up in inside
Spring into action, their death to be mine
Drinking, feeding, hunger abating
Bloody death of innocence my food
Their fear my substance of life
Where I live darkness abounds
And Death gives life to those who dwell within

TokenArt

Here is the second part of "Time" (..which I have changed to "Thought") ..I just wrote this right now ..its 1:57 AM haha. Here it is:
"Thought"
Stop worrying about
The same old fear of what other's think of you

Your too lost in your pride
In your high self-esteem
in your own happiness
Stop riding other people's fate

You're lost in yourself
You're waisting your time
The clock is going to run out on you before you've helped one soul

You think you've helped yourself
Wake up: being pretty isn't going to help you in the end

BUt we've been living in lies
From the men in ties
Feeding lies ...not people

The time may come to an end
What then?
All hours may perish
With all that we've cherished

Maybe this minute is over...

Maybe it's time to go

Maybe the Train is leaving...
-Sean ©All Rights Reserved (haha)

This may be the end of this song but I think I'm going to add to the part about you being lost in ..stuff ..maybe exend and explain but I think that last part is going to be the ending of the song ..I thought it was a real cool effect.. enjoy.

I better go to sleep now .. it will be lunch time when I wake up again....

Awesome 2nd addition :) I do that a lot too lol, but I hope you slept well ;)

Here's one I wrote for/about my BF (it's kinda long and a lil mushy.. lol)

Hearing your voice
Echo in my dreams
Letting the sound
Flow through me

Falling asleep
To the feeling of joy
Is something
I will never let go of

Fearing life no more
You letting me be me
Means more than anything
Even the breath I breathe

Even though the wait
Seems like forever
I know soon
We'll be in eachothers arms.

Able to hold you close
And you the same with me
Time will stop whenever we look
Into eachothers eyes

Every word you speak
Gives me courage
To keep moving on
Day by day

I love the way you make me laugh
And the beautiful song
Our love sings
When we say I love you

Smile a wonderful joy
Laugh a beautiful song
Sing me to sleep
And take over my dreams
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Hope you enjoyed :)

Here's one I just wrote*


I’m just so confused
I don’t know what to do
I’ve been lost for so long
And now I’ve found myself not so strong

My heart’s breaking in two
And my love it’s for you
I hate myself for saying it
But I don’t know if I can’t not quit

The stress in my heart is so cold
I don’t know if I can hold
Onto your hand anymore
Because my heart is so sore

I’ve thought so much
But it’s like my soul needs a crutch
Just to hold its head
Above the line of red

I’ve cried to God’s ears
And even though I know he hears
It like my heart doesn’t want to listen
So on my face the tears glisten

What am I supposed to do
My heart is so confused

Cool. A few suggestions though, I think you should say instead of "but its like my soul needs a crutch" just say but my soul needs a crutch. and instead of "Its like my heart doesnt want to listen" just say that it doesnt want to listen. ..but maybe not on that last one cause I see why you put that. ..just sounds more poetic that way ..Just a Thought.

:) Thnx for the suggestions! I didn't really go over it, i was just in the "flow" of writing, but I'll make those revisions on my paper :) Thanx again Sean!

I certainly know what you mean. And what you mean by the flow of writing. and No Problem.

OK Here is my song "Thought" start to finish.
It has 3 parts:
"Thought"
I. Time
Time is something that is given to you
You can't give your time without having recieved it first

You must use your time for the good,
for the endless memories

You look out your door thinking of past times
it's all to much to bare when you want the people close to you to feel what you feel and have
But they're too stubborn and selfish to realize that their time is almost up

Time is like a train
A Train of Thought
Traveling at the speed of light
...it's a beautiful.. yet saddening sight

You can't spend your life depressing over the loss of a loved one
...or knowing that you won't see someone again

...but maybe you will
maybe life is just a minute in an hour

Our Time is running out
God will come to wipe us out

You can't spend your life worring about will happen next
Take it slow
You'll only be a child for 20 seconds in a minute

You can't live life not looking at others
You can't pass them by
Your time will die

At the sight of the flight of the Train of Thought

Train of the memories

Train of Time

II.Thought

Stop worrying about
The same old fear of what other's think of you

Your too lost in your pride
In your high self-esteem
in your own happiness
Stop riding other people's fate

You're lost in yourself
You're waisting your time
The clock is going to run out on you before you've helped a single soul

You think you've helped yourself
Wake up: being pretty isn't going to help you in the end

Our Time is running out
God will come and wipe us out
Dont Stop: Believe in something
Don't Stop: Believe in the right things

But we've been living in lies
From the men in ties
Feeding lies ...not people starving

III. Time to Go

The time may come to an end
What Then?
All hours may perish
With all that we're cherished

Our time is out
God come ..wipe us out

The Train is leaving
Men are weaping
There just isnt enough room
All these people should have payed the price to earn a seat on the Train of Thought

But maybe this minute is over...

Maybe its time to go

...maybe the train is leaving

-Sean ©All Right Reserved haha its 12:25 I just finished it up now.. I've started wiith the music ..it's going to take awhile though.

:) Awesome 3rd addition Sean, and GL on the music!

haha Thanks.

Darkness abounds
Hunger takes over
Return to my hunting grounds
Crouching in wait..
A meal to abate
This hunger I feel
Need blood to heal
Prey approaches
Closer and closer it walks
Thirst and hunger well up in inside
Spring into action, their death to be mine
Drinking, feeding, hunger abating
Bloody death of innocence my food
Their fear my substance of life
Where I live darkness abounds
And Death gives life to those who dwell within

Written by
TokenArt

Reminds me of a lion on the hunt ;) I like it tho, it's a darker poetry

Gates of hell open before me!
My soul enters the flames of pain!
Agony, and hatred fills my mind!
No love or affection to blind my pain!
Please don't cry for me!
Rejoyce that you no longer know me!
I am the pain in all your lives!
My death will be your greatest gift to me!
Kill me, Make your life joyful again!
My pain shall not be yours!
You should not know my suffering!
Death is my only friend now!
Come the taker of souls!
Death come take me to your hell!!

Written by
TokenArt

Someone listens to Metallica.

lol Sean

Did I miss something?

TokenArt

no.. lol

I liked those last two a lot, very dark and poetic

I feel like I did....whats the remark about metallica?

TokenArt

Just sayin your lyrics are a lot like metallica i'm supposing

Last time I have listened to them was back when "enter sandman" stuff just came out....haven't really listened to any of their newer stuff...

TokenArt

Well, I guess Sean can speak for himself by what he meant :-)

yep thats what I meant. ..kind of like their "Fade to Black" and other depressing lyrics. But take no offense.

ok..none taken...was just wondering about it....

This one I need some help on ...badly ..so Bethany (or anyone else) if you have any suggestions PLEASE let me know. ..and by suggestions I mean to continue it ..becasue its not done.\
"The Fall of Darkness"

In the night when the wolves are howling
That's when the darkness comes

You know when darkness is present
When the trains are screaching
When the owls are hootin' a
and the midnight mice are rollin (i wrote this on the bus so its definately pretty cheesy at least in the beginning)

When all us black and the Devil's shadow
Is covering the city
Ther is Darkness

Dark: There is darkness all around us
Scream: You can scream you can run, you can hide but if you believe
You will suffer
Pray: pray to the Mother of all us
Pray: to our God above us

Love: Have love for all your nieighbors and the darkness will fall!!

Pray: pray to the Mother of us
Pray: pray to God above us

Live: Carpe Diem for the time is running (translation, Carpe Diem: Seize the Day)

and thats all ..yeah pretty much ...well needs lots of help... ©All Rights Reserved

hmm, lets see.

In the night when the wolves are howling high to the moon
That's when the darkness approaches

You know darkness is consumimg
When the crows are screaching
When the owls are cooing
and the midnight mice are searching for a hiding place

When our hearts are black
And the Devil's shadow is consuming the city
There is Darkness abounding there

(I just thought maybe adding the Dark, ect., was a little much.)
There is darkness running through our veins.
You may scream and run and hide, but the darkness seeps through when you fear it in your soul.
So pray to God to save us now.

Love will break this curse tonight
Don't let hate and fear take over
Love those around you now.
Live and seize the day (I thought Carpe Diem didn't fit in there personally, just my thoughts)

So ya. Hope I didn't ruin it lol, and actually I don't think it needs to go on any furthur, Carpe Diem seems to sum it up pretty well i think, but again, just my thoughts ;)

lol ..no didn't ruin it ..different ..but still good ..really like some of the things you said ..thanks.

:D WHEW! lol, I was hoping i didn't

I just came up with some really awesome guitar lics!

The love I have for you is bitter
But I can never forget when u were kind
And then I remember why it was
And now I hate u even more

Bitterness quells in me
Rising until it reaches the boiling point
Rising to the top and burning red
How could I forget those things

But then I remember life must go on
And that all my bitterness will eventually show
I must forgive all your wrongs
If not for you...then for myself

All of your lies of love and myth
While covering your true face
Just waiting for something devastating
And uncovering your mask..to reveal hate

I will fight you with all I am
The daily battle
To the end
I will not let you take control of me

Again, I say
Life must go on
I can’t hold to the bitter past
Or I’ll stay there forever

Letting go isn’t easy
Trust me I know
But sometimes..
All you can do is forgive

Bitterness..feel my wrath
I will not be controlled by you
Feel my sword
And die..leave my heart forever

Temtation: Why wont you leave me alone;
Lurking in the corner. Everywhere I go.
Self Control: Don't turn your back on me now;
When I need you most -Dream Theater

I thought of that song when I read your last post.
Anyway nice song. I like the idea ..it is good ground to cover. Nice job.

Thanks Sean :D

Good Stuff here......

Indeed.

Thanks Lori! I love everyone's poetical abilities :) I feel right at home here

Indeed.

Best song lyrics ever:

All in all the clock is slow
Six coloured pictures all in a row
Of a marigold

Ya know this is very inspiring to me. Very nicely done.I bet it took you a while to do it. ...a lot of time put in to it and it shows. You should really be in the music buis. I asume that you are a fan of Pink Floyd. For It apeared as an inspiration from the lyics:

All in all its just another Brick in the Wall
All in all you're just another Brick in the Wall.

Maybe not. Anyway you are now my hero.

Thats actually marigold by nirvana,one of the few sung by dave and backup by kurt, sorry for not crediting at the end. I wish i could write lyrics to the music i compose lol. But it wouldnt matter, I wouldnt be able to sing it. I'll stick to composing instrumentals, ha.

oh oopps. I thought that was just gag lyrics.. that you just made up and posted as a joke. ...opps!! I was just kidding, LOLLOLOL. I feel bad now. ..i guess they actually are pretty good. ..hahah.

ROFL

the lyrics are not to be taken for face value. an entire discussion could be made on those 3 lines if you make an attempt at finding a deeper meaning or symbolizm. thats why I like them.

Yeah thats why i said i guess they actually are pretty good. I meant no offense also. ...and Bethany, ..what the heck is ROFL?

lol, rofl means rolling on the floor laughing

no offense, i purposefully put them on there with no explination cause i knew no one would probably get it
<-trouble maker

dont think too hard, remember the eye sees all

...your freaking me out again. lol j/k and Bethany ..yeah hahhahalllol again! ..lol. ...now that im all caught up....

Here;s another that i just wrote. ..touched upon so many things ..I think the whole point may have been missed. ..i dont know i just wrote it so it hasn't been revised yet.

"Emotions"

Why do I feel this way?
Will I go or shall I stay?
All these feeling, with no one to share them
I have all these emotions and don't know what to do

Someone out there
But where
How can I do this?
With nothing to spare

All these memories
Why must it end?
Filling you with emotions
Making you want it again

But you know that its over
You know that you're older
Time is flyin
Once it was the 60's
Now it's 2010

People are dying
Others are crying
All feeling the memories of good days
NOw time has changed

Someone speical is waiting for you
But where am I?
Why do I want to cry?

Don't leave
Before you were here
Don't die
Before you could fly

Where is now?
Why is this?
Why does music full the heeart with emotion?




I remeber a time
When my cousin and I
Sat in the dark
Drinking pop and listening to Bob Dylan

I remeber a time
When all was fine
And the next day Nothing was sacred

I remeber a time
When rap ruled the world
And then I heard Dream Theater

I remeber a time
When silly string was flying through the air
And Mountain Dew was bursting out of its lid

But at the end of the day
You are still left with no one
Sitting alone listening to Pink Floyd
Wishing you were here

Wishing for hope
And hoping for the next day

Should I stay or shall go?
Go to 2020
I wish to stay
But it doesn't work that way

On a day like today
Time disappears
Memories are revisted
Emotion reappears...

Well thats all.

Hmm, I like this one Sean. Creative and expressive as usual :)

Thanks for the feedback Bethany. By the way a lot of this is like stuff that I did (like the "I remember a time..." parts) so it probably won't make sense there. ..a lot of it doesn't make sense ..you have to think about it/

I got most of it(i think). Rememberence to the past days of careless bliss.. lol

haha. You've got the idea.

I was just veiwing the image "Life After Death" ..and there was some descution of suicde and it reminded me of the song "Another Day" ..so I posted the lyrics:

"Another Day"

Live another day
Climb a little higher
Find another reason to stay
Ashes in your hands
Mercy in your eyes
If you're searching for a silent
sky...

You won't find it here
Look another way
You won't find it here
So die another day

The coldness of this words
The message in his silence,
"Face the candle to the
wind..."
This distance in my voice
Isn't leaving you a choice
So if you're looking for a time
to run away...

You won't find it here
Look another way
You won't find it here
So try another day

They took pictures of our
dreams
Ran to hide behind the stairs
And said maybe when it's right
for you, they'll fall
But if they don't come down
Resist the need to pull them in
And throw them away
Better to save the mystery
Than surrender to the secret

You won't find it here
Look another way
You won't find it here
So try another day
-Dream Theater (lyrics by John Petrucci)

Anyway the reason for posting this on this descussion board was for one to presuade any suicidal people to ..live another day because these lyrics are really persuading to "not jump" at least for me. Secondly because while reading these the line " Better to save the mystery Than surrender to the secret" really meant a lot to me. ..that's good ol'John Petrucci for ya! ..for more john Petrucci lyric references read my sig ..or search on google Dream Theater Lryics.

Well that inspired me to write my own "live another day" song:

"Putting Away the Knife"

Bored with life
Bringing out the knife
Not being able to cope
Starting to tie the rope

Breathing wasted air
NOt knowing where to stare
Giving not a care
Saying it's not fair

Wanting to give in
To know what's beyond the air
Turning the other chin
Or is it all bare

So close but giving in
Going your own way
Not following fate
Wanting to go before it's too late

IS it really that bad?
Why am I so mad?
Do you really want to play God?
Or are you too impatient to wait for Fate?


Say you pull the knife
Say you end your life
Will you just come back
Or will you descend to the unknow fact

Will the bitterness end at the rope
Or do you still have hope
Are you unforgiven or full of yourself
No one can say it better than John but your answer lies within life

Need you find it here
Not die and fear
You won't find it in the knife
It is in life
Find a reason to live
And the secret of death will come to thee.

..wow i've come up with like four songs in three months..
-Sean

Awesome.

Thank you Bethany ,,you are a woman of many words. lol.

Wow Sean... you are very talented... great work...

Thanks a lot Jacqueline. I'm glad that you liked my work and I appreicate it. Do you have any work of your own? If so I would love to hear (or more like read) them.

lol, I know I am sean! ;) That was the point!

lol.

I see that you're a man of few words also ;)

lol ..when I laugh.. haha. But since I read the constructive critizim topic board I've been making longer comments on images ..usually.

I dont write songs sean... but i do write poetry and stuff.... you and Bethany have some great lyrics... :D

Thanks a lot Jacqueline! (YES I gotta fan ..lol!) ..well i would like to see your poetry too ..ya know to see what ya got. See ya.

Uhh I just read my last posted lyics and edited a LOT of mistakes ..so if you didnt understand something the first time reading it through you might want to check it again... sorry.

This is more of poetry but oh well.

He Spoke wisdom to me
And still I cannot see
Why> why can i not die
Stop feeding me lies
It far time to seee the truth

What I Seek
Is Beyond the bleek
It is time to close thy mouth
Time to listen to the words spoken
Don't block them from soking in
It's time for the end

Come to Me
Thy Answer Waits
For it is fate
And we shall not take someone else's fate
It is not for us to decide

Here is another ..poem thing, but this one has less rythem and more thought in it. Has ideas that the song "THe Great Debate" deals with. I wrote this after the second presidential debate. Doesn't have a title yet though:
The Great Debate has started,
unified groups have now parted,
too many questions left unanswered,
too many lies taken unthinkingly.

Is it really killing?
IS it Fate Defying?
IF it's unstopable should we use it to heal?
Or is this our last meal?

Why, why must it be so hard?
Politicans have in-advance marked their card,
Has technology gone too far?
When you get a heart transplant are you getting other's spirit?

Has it all gone to far>

It's preventing lige, love, hope, faith, trust..
But is it killing?

Questions challenging your own beliefs,
No way to stop it so might as well put it to use?

This is the Great Debate,
Tired of all the hate.
"Things are Rough all over" (from the book The Outsiders)
Why cause misery to others?

It's not needed.

Are we going down?
Shall we raise the ground?
Is it our place to decide Fate?
For it causes hate.

Or is this meant to be?
Is this fate?
Does this hold the key?
For it caused the Great Debate.

Is this our plan?
Is this endless Sacrifice justiffiable?
Or is it still deniable murder?

Preventing life,
preventing hope,
preventing love,
Preventing yet causing hate,
But yet it's not murder

Stopping beating hearts,
You deny (i think thats how you spell it) it even starts.
Yet it's not murder?

So what happens to the empty souls?
Do they suceed life which they've never lived?

They say:
"It's better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all"

Does that not apply to life?
Better to have lived and hit a few bumps in the road than to have never lived life at all?

Never have a chance to breathe air,
Give a stare,
Have a care,
Run fingers through her hair.

Never be able to love,
Hope,
Give,
Feel,
LIVE.

yep thats it ..figure out what im talking about for yourself.

I very ashamedly (seriously, no sarcasm) modeled the words on the tune of an existing song and launched my lyrics from the originals. *shrink in shame* Don't persecute me. Please. The lyrics are a lot different. And I am horrible at making up tunes.
(modeled off of the Jars of Clay song "Hymn" from the album "Much Afraid")
(verse one)
hidden past my hardened heart
deep under barriers so strong
there is a me that no one sees
a me that no one ever heeds
(verse 1 still)
not pain nor bitterness so deep
nor death shall break my heart of hope
i'll pirouette upon my grave
and nothing can my bright faith stay

(chorus)
look deep into my eyes and see
that i am joyful as can be
fear, anger, loneliness, and pain
will never conquer me

(verse 2)
they think that i'm so lonely
but what it is they do not see
is pain is conquered long before
it gets into depths of my soul

(chorus)

the joy of life carries away
all doubt, all loneliness, all pain
they'll never see me win the fight
they'll never see me bring the light

(chorus x2)
. . . will never conquer me (x3 in all at end)


The only line I really stole was "i'll pirouette upon my grave" and "the joy of life carries away" was kind of similar. Actually, the meaning isn't what I based my lyrics on, it was the structure. Some of the same-sounding words but really completely different idea and focus from the original. I can't really remember the original at the moment and I always lose those books with the lyrics because I use wallets not the original cases. Those cheap cases just get busted up. And they take up too much room.

I liked the JoC original, but I really like yours too :) Nice job. I also like yours Sean! Sorry it took so long to say it!

Thanks, Bethany. I've got others but that's the only one I have memorized and I don't have any with me . . . get back to you.
Oh, and I like your stuff.

:D Thanks!

Wow This is cool! Gotta start digging out my old lyrics

Pheonix, I LOVE your icon . . . WHAT IS IT?????????????

Hey thanks Bethany! =)

Wow, these were good times, I remember staying up till real late reading and posting these things inthe summer.. ..good times ..good times.. ...I miss caedes.net..

this topic has died down quite a bit.. but i figured id post something anyway.. being lead guitar and vocals in my band, im always writing.. so if youd like to hear more, just let me know..

Option21 - Blistered

No matter what I seem to say..
No matter what I try to do..
I cant make everything alright..
Why should I be the only one to choose..

No matter what dreams I have..
No matter which way I turn..
I cant find me inside myself..
Always left alone to burn..

-o-What can I do to make this all go away
-o-Where can I go to hide from this pain
-o-Who will be there, when I need them most
-o-How could I let this happen to me

-I feel so (Blistered)
-Torn apart at the seams
-You leave me (Blistered)
-A victim to my dreams

No matter how hard I try..
No matter how hard I fight..
I just cant find my way..
Someone please show me the light..

-I feel so (Blistered)
-Torn apart at the seams
-You leave me (Blistered)
-A victim to my dreams

-/-One more time to numb the pain
-/-One more time, come back again
-/-One more time to kill the pain
-/-One more time, come back again

..and ..Im ..blistered

-I feel so (Blistered)
-Torn apart at the seams
-You leave me (Blistered)
-A victim to my dreams
-So here I am (blistered)
-Before you like a curse
-And you leave me blistered
-Just like before

I am a composer by night, I can't do lyrics though :s I have doen a few orchestral pieces etc.

lyrics are only are hard to write as you make them.. just let the words flow.. just think about an emotion or something specific.. try that and see how it works

If I ever tried to write a song it'd just end up being about teapots and camels or something else which was random and ridiculous :P I just have a strange mind :S

haha.. that works for some bands tho, so never discourage yourself..

yeah... like "The Beatles' haha hence songs like "Everyone's got something to hide except me and my monkey" "Piggies" "ob-la-de ob-la-da" "Paperback Writer" ect.

yellow submarine lol....

Haha yeah. Many more too, like Octopus's Garden.

I know this "topic" sort of died a bit ...but here's my attempt to revive it:
One of my latest lyrics (not finished yet.. suggestions would be great. Also keep in mind that almost ALL of this song is metaphoric):
"Star Seeker"
I'm searching for the moonlit sky
I'm searching for the sunlit Night

I'm planning the perfect flight
I'm planning to fly

I'm searching for the unlit fire
I'm searching for the burning lamp

I'm looking for the fireless light
I'm looking for the fuelless fire

I want to find the Star of Light
While I shun the Dark of Night

I'm looking for the lighted star
I've found the lightless moon

Hello Stars, I'll see you soon
Hello sun, Thy I do not shun
Goodnight Moon, I see your
Lunar light wish me a Goodnight

Your Radiance is hard to muss
Yet no ones' fire is lit
On this night I blow you a kiss
On this night I wait and sit

I am seasrching for the light
in this darkened room
I can see darkness by the light of the moon

Someday I'll walk with you
Someday you'll talk with me
In this talk we'll learn something new
Then we will be able to see

On this night I seek the Light
What I seek is beyond the Meek

Now I look up to the sky
I do wish I could fly
I see the black with shining Light

Oh to be a bird,
Blackbird
Bluebird
Yellow Bird
New Bird

Oh to be above
Oh to be a dove

White dove fly
Into the sky
Sore higher than the stars
Fly all the way to Mars

Tell me bluebird
What do you see
Above the trees
Up in the clouds
With Hercules

Hey Blackbird, sing me a song
Was it you all along?
Blackbird sing to me
It is now, that I see

As I search the stars
As I search the skies
There's this Yellow bird I haven't forgotten
Though it looks kind of far
And it seems disguised

Hola New Bird
You keep us going
You keep the drums a-rollin'
You keep the horns a-blowin'

Blackbird, teach me
Teach me to fly
Good-bye

Bluebird you've shown me
The concept of the sky
Good-bye

The Yellow Bird, I Keep looking for
Evermore

Newbird, You've shown me the flight
I'll keep you in sight,
Goodnight


...that's all I have so far, I don't know if I want to end it there, though I could...

Song writing is very therapeutic. As a therapist, I know that some people can't describe how they feel about something, but they can tell you a song that tells how they feel. I am in the process of accumulating therapeutic songs if anyone knows of any specific songs about healing, violence, relationships, addictions, etc.

Thanks for the songs. Some of those I never would have thought of.

wow..its been a long time, but what the hell?

The Halo

There’s an old man sitting in the corner
Of my mind
He’s writing in a notebook
About his love
About his life
He’s a kind man
Kind of stubborn man

The kind of man you see in a rocking chair
Sleeping most the time
With coffee cup in hand
Please fill the cup
Wake him up

He's the one that grew tall
He's the old wise man
Who thinks and waits to speak
Until the timing is right

He has a heart of gold
He has a mind of steel
A soul of magnesium
And I think I love him

There’s a brightly colored bird
Living in the hollow of my head
Sleeping in her bed
The bed she made out of dirt and dead sticks
An awful mixture

The kind of bird that comes out
On a sunny day
When the clouds are white and sky is free
The kind of bird that soars through your sight
In a graceful flight

(need to finish this verse...)

There's a young girl in the garden of my mind
She’s picking flowers, kicking rocks, wearing knee socks
And this girl
She's a lovely girl
Such a lovely girl
The kind of girl with flowers in her hair
A Radiance in her stare
A joy in her despair
A Loveliness in her glare
She's the girl whose smile is like pearls
And her brown hair curls
She may be distressed (or maybe she’s growing up)
She has a heart of white
A mind of sight
A soul of lead
And I think I love her

And there's a mother in the heart of my left wing
She gives me the will, the power to sing
She's the one that knows, all that I'll do
And still she'll sing, "baby, I love you"
And I know, I know that I love her too

And there's a father in the back of my head, in the bottom of my heart
And I don’t know what I can do for him, though he watches over me
And I hope to see
Him someday soon. Someday soon
Until then, I'll carry, I'll carry
His halo, my halo, His halo, our Halo
But until then, I'll lay low, I'll lay low..
You know all that I know

My halo... Your Halo...