Clearer? I like this one the way it is! You have the soft general shape of a feather here and the colors being so soft and feathery really fit with that. I'd give this one quite high marks indeed!
For in and out, above, about, below,
'Tis nothing but a Magic Shadow-show,
Play'd in a Box whose Candle is the Sun,
Round which we Phantom Figures come and go.
From Edward Fitzgerald's Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam