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::third_eye
09/06/06 1:25 PM GMT
The poem below was written by me at 15. While my 15 might've been somewhat different than a typical 15 today, I suppose I might've undergone some of the same teen angst.

So here's a little peek into where I was at the time. Hope you enjoy it.
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Alley Cat

I am a black cat with grey-brown streaks running along my side.
I'm always walking confident yet carefree,
knowing I'm ready to scratch, bite
or kill an opponent.
I land on my feet like a whisper,
green eyes flashing left and right,
taking everything in.
I extend my claws and and tear a piece of thrown out rug to shreds.
It's not the rug I see.
It's the enemy.
In my mind's eye,
I see the enemy.
It is not another cat like myself,
but that cleaned,
combed cat that represents a twisted aspect of life.
That part of life you just want to strangle,
and when you finally do,
you find out a moment too late you have strangled your own self.
For this cat is what you want to be,
but never can.
By strangling that cat,
you guarantee you will stay the way you are.

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This was in the centerfold of a school magazine called "Mindprints", along with three other works, and had a background of a black cat peering out of a window. Hopefully my 15 was indeed very different than what teens today go through, but perhaps this might help or inspire someone today.

In any case, enjoy :o)
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I saw a peanut stand, heard a rubber band, I saw a needle that winked its eye. But I think I will have seen everything When I see an elephant fly. MY GALLERY

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.mesmerized
09/06/06 2:30 PM GMT
Thanks for sharing this Rob...very interesting angle on how alot of people, in particular alot of youth, can feel deep down but don't acknowledge or even admit to themselves...it is definitely food for thought...good work.:Pat.
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You can't trust a tiger. You never know when he might be lion.
&KEIFER
09/06/06 2:43 PM GMT
oh, OK .. (*backs away slowly*) .. ;o)
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::noahnott
09/06/06 7:26 PM GMT
...ahh, good times.
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::madmaven
09/07/06 1:37 PM GMT
Very deep...and an insightful piece. Nice work....
Show us more...:)
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::third_eye
09/07/06 1:40 PM GMT
most of my writing at that time was mostly inner narrative, not prose or poetry, and long since destroyed and/or lost. i mean, this was 22 years ago...but thanks for liking it :)
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I saw a peanut stand, heard a rubber band, I saw a needle that winked its eye. But I think I will have seen everything When I see an elephant fly. MY GALLERY
.animaniactoo
09/07/06 4:08 PM GMT
what? you can't make more? 8•P
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One man sees things and says "why?" - but I dream things that never were and I say "why not?"
::third_eye
09/07/06 4:10 PM GMT
i suppose i could, and yes i know you're teasing, but it would feel contrived. I wrote that piece almost totally out of spontaneity...if the mood hits..who knows? but that's what would get me going again.
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I saw a peanut stand, heard a rubber band, I saw a needle that winked its eye. But I think I will have seen everything When I see an elephant fly. MY GALLERY
::laurengary
09/07/06 7:15 PM GMT
You know Rob, there's a poetry thread around here somewhere. I don't think anyone's uploaded there in a while & while granted, you were 15, I bet you could do some beautiful poetry again.
Give it a try
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My parents made me what I am today ....... I'm thinking of suing ......CLICK TO SAVE LIVES ! .......MY GALLERY
::third_eye
09/07/06 7:20 PM GMT
i suppose..but certain things are so much better, purer, and vivid when they aren't done 'on command' but rather, the result of inspiration. want examples? sex, cooking, driving, singing, etc.. all come out better when they're felt first, and done second.
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I saw a peanut stand, heard a rubber band, I saw a needle that winked its eye. But I think I will have seen everything When I see an elephant fly. MY GALLERY
.animaniactoo
09/07/06 7:26 PM GMT
does that mean I should stop telling my bf it's time to give it up? 8•P
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One man sees things and says "why?" - but I dream things that never were and I say "why not?"
::third_eye
09/07/06 7:27 PM GMT
wowwwww um, i wouldnt touch that with the minute hand from the clocktower....
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I saw a peanut stand, heard a rubber band, I saw a needle that winked its eye. But I think I will have seen everything When I see an elephant fly. MY GALLERY
::J_272004
09/07/06 11:11 PM GMT
Cat was talking about the cooking, driving, singing .. werent you Cat.. LOL...

Good poem, a lot of emotion in there .. thanks for sharing Rob
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MY GALLERY ........... "A sense of humour is as important to life as shock absorbers to a car.. It helps us over the bumps im life" / P.K. Shaw

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