I have been asked to comment on this rendering. While many would find it not "busy" enough, I like the simple elegance of it. For a first time work, I find it very smooth and easy on the eye. It is a piece that is definitely relaxing to look at. Keep up the good work. If you want to see some relaxing pieces, I suggest you check out laurengary's work.
Looks great especially for a first timer. I wouldn't be able to do as well. Very artistic. Has a real flow. It reminds me of cigarette smoke. Keep up the good work.