Something about the composition doesn't quite work to my eyes and in my humble opinion. Even taking into consideration the concept and idea behind your shot.
I think if you had come around (to the right) and shifted camera position a bit, still employing the DOF employed (if possible) ... and in effect tightening up the shot some (bringing the outlying bloom closer to the other more dominant blooms) ... then, yes. Again, in my humble opinion.
What I see here, or saw initially ... and this could the be case that once I did see this, I couldn't shake it from my mind ... is this:
Granted, tad pedestrian ... with that said, however.. think the composition is stronger.
/\ Anyways, and as always ... just some creative food for thought.
I do like the softness and delicacy of the shot.
Tonal range is good good. The rework (sort of) linked above does have a Curves adjustment (knocked it back quite a bit to try and maintain the feel of your original) ... which made/makes it slightly more contrasted.
Kudos for bringing to us something different and original. Which, I do appreciate very much.
Take the above nonsense of mine as a compliment, please.
To stimulate another's imagination and creativity and to provoke some thought suggests, to me.. mission accomplished.
:o)
p.s. Might be interesting to see the original original?