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The Echoes of Summers Past (2nd try)
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Uploaded: 01/13/09 2:46 AM GMT
The Echoes of Summers Past (2nd try)
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Ok, after some subtle (and not subtle, lolol) critique of this one, I tried again. I posted it to the "Your Community" gallery because, while it is an entirely new set of images, it is really a rework of the previous attempt. I am more interested in honest critique, suggestions, tips than anything else. Much improved, little improved, stick to entertaining your family with shots of your Father-in-law in his Bermuda Shorts at an entertainment park and leave us alone...have at it folks. Give me the good, the bad and the ugly. The Techs: Canon 40D on a tripod with a remote trigger. Shot near sunset, shutter priority mode 1/4, f22, 28-200 Tamron lens at 28, ISO 200. This is 3 seperate images merged in PS. (and my thanx to Lauren for suggesting the title change!)
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::billyoneshot
01/13/09 3:00 AM GMT
MUCH MUCH BETTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Billy
This is much much better Rich, I agree completely. This has a certain dreamy, wistful, almost nostalgic feel that to a certain degree I think your first one lacked.... just a bit. I really like them both, but I really like this one better. ;oD Faved !!
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Much better. The first did convey the mood very well, but this one has better definition and details. The only thing I think would add (to that mood)would be older swings or more dated than these shiny poles. : ) Very nice!
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I believe Elizabeth's point about older swings is valid GBRx3.
The illusion of the swings is much better. I wonder what a image of a child in the swing would do? Kudos for your improvement and effort.
Hope your son stays out of harms way.
The illusion of the swings is much better. I wonder what a image of a child in the swing would do? Kudos for your improvement and effort.
Hope your son stays out of harms way.
Tick
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You are what you are until you aren't.
My first impression was that ghosts of children would improve it. However, having looked more I think that there should be a single solitary swing movement with a child with the others stationary to make a strong statement. However, this picture is technically good and it is much better than the first.
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Don't take any notice of my comments. I post pictures that get a CI of 0! (Well almost)
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I like both pictures. It all depends on what kind of mood I'm in as to which looks the best. Nice rework.
Jimbob
Jimbob
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OK, I ditto what Tick and Chris said about a child in the image, blurred with the swings... it might make the echo of summers past even more poignant... Did you use a flash? The first metal pole is lit up and it distracts my eye from the intention of the image, which tugs sweetly on my emotions. Although... nicely done!
mary
mary
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"Never let your studies interfere with your education." - Pete Seeger
Much improvement and I think it tells the story much better! I have to agree with Mary about the lit up pole, but that could be easily taken care of.
Nicely done!
:)PJ
Nicely done!
:)PJ
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We don’t make art to show someone what something looks like. All this requires is eyes (or a lens). Art is supposed to have meaning, emotion, power, or magic. Alan & Mario "FourThirds"
Perhaps, some additional or other toning, Rich?
Sepia, for example. Although a tad pedestrian and predictable, it does bring out the shadows, shapes ... as in, the footprints in the snow. (Would 'warm' it up some overall as well.)
Agreed. Much better, technically.
Artistically, or conceptually? Need some more context, in my very humble opinion. As per the suggestions above with the inclusion of a person/child.
That said, I do see ... again ... your aforethought(s) in the composition as presented to us.
I really do feel and think that by changing the overlay colour to something that is a tad warmer would go a long ways and add to the story you are trying to tell here. Just some thoughts, that's all.
Next?
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Sepia, for example. Although a tad pedestrian and predictable, it does bring out the shadows, shapes ... as in, the footprints in the snow. (Would 'warm' it up some overall as well.)
Agreed. Much better, technically.
Artistically, or conceptually? Need some more context, in my very humble opinion. As per the suggestions above with the inclusion of a person/child.
That said, I do see ... again ... your aforethought(s) in the composition as presented to us.
I really do feel and think that by changing the overlay colour to something that is a tad warmer would go a long ways and add to the story you are trying to tell here. Just some thoughts, that's all.
Next?
:o)
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