I agree that the lighting could be improved (think floor or table lamps). If you grayscale the image you can see that there's very little variation in light, and it's mostly midtones, except for the black dress.
Also, the model gets lost in everything around her - the door, the tree, the wall - which can easily be fixed by cropping the image. Try placing her against the right frame of the image, leaving a little room above her head (I would leave the left border as is). So basically, shrink the image down from the top and from the right. Example.
I also agree about the lighting, I would leave the right wall as it is and work on the left border as with clone out the door and the floor (also in the right border), so the only thing that is left is the background with the silhouettes behind her to get a clean shot and I would crop it a bit to get a better balance in it.
I can't make an example for you , cause I am not on my own PC, otherwise I would make one.
But overall not a bad shot, mood is good and the pose of the model is good too :o)
To my eye, everything works very well together in this photo to bring about the mood you state in the narrative. The model is not lost in everything around her it is rather her consuming feelings that surround her. Fine work and just got a 10 in the VB from me.
Thank you everyone for commmenting on the photo, i do see what you mean about the lighting and I'm truely greatful that you guys can help me grow as a photographer. I will really use this information in the future!
Stan-thanks for the comment as well-i do agree with you! and i do feel that the photo makes you feel like your more "trapped inside" Thank you for the wonderful 10 in the VB!