We don’t make art to show someone what something looks like. All this requires is eyes (or a lens). Art is supposed to have meaning, emotion, power, or magic. Alan & Mario "FourThirds"
I have to agree with everyone above. If I were to say anything to help you make this a stronger image it would to use a third party image correction program and eliminate all the bright spots in the out of focus area. Try it I think you will like the results. Keep snapping, you definitely have the eye.
:) PJ